Monday, January 13, 2025

Author, Character "coming of age"

 Author, character "coming of age"

Author Donan Berg in "Lucia's Fantasy World" creates a story that follows a young girl, Lucia, as she learns of her full potential while experiencing coming-of-age moments while trying to rescue a sick friend facing death. (Literary Titan, Five Stars)

When asked for his inspiration, Author Donan Berg expanded upon his own childhood. He said a phrase and the experience of having no crayons when starting first grade stood out.

The phrase, he attributed to the Orient, was: "Fall down seven times, stand up eight."

His first-grade experience required a little background.

He recounted that he'd spent six months with his mother and brother in Ireland, the country of his birth, before he and his mother had, years before, joined her husband and his father in the United States heartland.  As a rambunctious five-year-old in Ireland, he'd played with cousins and explored the creek that flowed through the garden behind his grandmother's candy store. In doing so, he'd missed kindergarten in the United States. 

On returning to his hometown to begin first grade, he learned that his classmates had in kindergarten received a new box of sixteen crayons to be carried over for use in first grade. Thus, in his having missed kindergarten, he had no box of crayons. To compensate, his first-grade teacher removed a crayon discard box from a windowsill and gave it to him for his exclusive personal use.

To this day, he can still recall his fellow students teasing him for having to use stubby crayons without sharpened points.

However, he was happy. He took pleasure in the positive.

While his classmates had only one crayon of each color, he laid out and counted six reds, eight greens, et cetera, many more crayons than the sixteen his classmates were limited to.

Years later, he adopted his youthful experience in Lucia's Fantasy World. Lucia, although her parents are split, has basic needs fulfilled. She has shelter in an apartment, food enough not to starve, and enough clothing to keep her warm. Although she might not be a school "glamor" girl, she has fun snow sledding with Johnny. He shares his sled and doesn't complain his one leg is in a metal brace. 

Yet, in her own mind, Lucia longs for material things her mother can't afford, especially a Christmas tree. Friend Omar has access to multiple Christmas trees as a Boy Scout working at a site that sells trees to support his troop, however, he can't just give her a tree.

Lucia is forced to rely on her own determination, to build a trust in her own ability, and to learn the value of human relationships. In her journey, the fantasy world she encounters and conquers teaches her lessons of survival and exposes her to values applicable to her physical world. The experience also brings forth her hidden talent.

Was she wrong to long for material things like a Christmas tree?  No. Lucia's desires are, by themselves, neither right nor wrong. It's the pathway to understanding one's morality and the relationship to others that's important. 

As Author Donan Berg would explain, material items like crayons have no intrinsic value beyond coloring, yet sometimes they do. The item gives the youth who is given it but one perspective on their place in society and the world at large. Society promotes a standard. You're given a box of crayons. You're to be limited to this box.

But are you?

What if you can achieve the same or greater artistry with discards? 

What if anything does the discard tell us? What role does human determination play? Shouldn't it require us to do better than good?

Check out history. Well along in the advance of civilization, man communicated by chiseling images on rock. How troubled would we all be if one minor error in what we sought to express required us to begin again with a new rock, a new boulder?

Then again, how often are we advised to wipe the slate clean?

A conundrum? Yes. Is there one in Lucia's Fantasy World? (www.authorsden.com/visit/viewwork.asp?id=79192 or an e-book at www.smashwords.com/books/view/1142569)

Yes. Yet, to read Lucia's Fantasy World may personally help.

 





Thursday, December 26, 2024

Thread suspense into the story

 

Thread suspense into the story

How does an author keep the reader interested?

A surefire way is to add the element of suspense. When incorporated into the story, this provides a payback to readers who have trusted you with their precious time.

The simplest definition of suspense is not knowing what will happen. For this, there needs to be a character the reader can emphasize with. Without reader empathy, adding an obstacle or visible peril won’t have pages turned.

If the reader cares, the creation of suspense requires the dilemma to linger before resolution. Let’s look at an example.

A bookstore browser enthusiastic for historical fiction is introduced to a 19th Century female coming of age. She has attractive attributes but fears a family history of sterility will damn her to spinsterhood. She meets the male heir to a stable of pedigree, prize-winning racehorses. He expresses a desire to raise a family.

Our heroine reluctantly explains to him that, if he should marry her, the odds of his attaining his goal is not guaranteed.

They nevertheless marry.

After two years, she’s still unable to conceive.

They adopt a young baby boy abandoned by a traveling gypsy caravan. Happy, the couple is heartbroken when authorities identify the boy as kidnapped, and the boy’s real father appears.

In secret, the heroine learns of an experimental method to be impregnated, and she volunteers to be a medical test case. When she becomes of child, she tells her husband. They are overjoyed to wait.

Within a month, the heroine miscarries.

For a second time, dread descends upon the heroine for life’s uncertainty has dealt her and her husband unexpected blows.

Will the reader keep on reading? The ending has not yet come. Will it be tragedy or success?

As the author, you know. And, by threading suspense of what the unexplained, but believable outcome, lies on upcoming pages will create a great incentive to keep the reader along in lockstep to complete the journey.

Wednesday, December 6, 2023

All's Forgiven by Donan Berg Earns 5-Star Review

 



5.0 out of 5 stars 

Trust No One, but Revel in the Mystery

Reviewed by Michael P. Hartnett in the United States on November 19, 2023

Donan Berg’s All’s Forgiven is one of those wild mysteries that keeps the reader guessing to the very end. Much of the lively engagement of constantly shifting suspicions comes from the novel centering on the viewpoint of Jenny Olsen, who’s a bit loopy and is recovering from an accident that also led to the death of her niece Eileen. Jenny is often uncertain and the reader more so. I can never fully trust her intense, emotional sister Ruth, her gruff Uncle John, the police officer and possible love interest Robert, and the urbane, mysterious professor Holmes, who also might be another love interest. The plot involving that niece’s death, car accidents, a valuable brooch from Queen Elizabeth’s inauguration, and, most importantly, the kidnapping of Jenny’s mother percolates along with amusing interactions and disarming twists.

The novel is filled with gothic elements, including the mysterious basements at home and at the bookstore where Jenny works. Berg plays with these subterranean notions which such lines as, “For Jenny, someone might well padlock her future behind the wall, never to be revived.” A single boot that may or may not belong to Jenny’s kidnapped mother, a missing garage key, and that brooch whose history and provenance vex and confound are situated around a group of characters prone to lying and keeping their counsel at inconvenient intervals. That Jenny’s bookstore borders on Riddle Jewelry where sister Ruth works adds another layer of proximity to their sibling tensions.

Little wonder Jenny makes asides like, “Afraid my memory gets jittery.” Oh, the revelations keep coming in a novel that subtly considers what is counterfeit and what is genuine. Without giving too much away, the reader is guessing right up to the final pages, where he discovers he’d been given sufficient clues all along. He was just too wrapped up in the crazy family drama and the bizarre combinations of romance and manipulation to center his pleasures on piecing together the puzzle. Donan Berg has given us quite a yarn across a snowy lowan landscape, one that keeps the reader involved and intrigued throughout.

All's Forgiven is available in paperback and e-book format at major book retailers. Click Purchase e-book here. Click  



 

Friday, September 1, 2023

All's Forgiven, a novel, available now

 Author Donan Berg's latest novel, All's Forgiven, in ebook

format is available at Amazon.com and at Smashwords.com 

Official paperback release on Amazon.com will be October 2, 2023.



All’s Forgiven is an inspired family drama where thirty-two-year-old Jenny Olsen’s life spirals into chaos. Jenny’s injured in a hit-and-run car accident that kills her young niece. Thieves kidnap her mother and demand a ransom. Romance teases Jenny’s heart as she struggles with an injured foot, engages in spats with her sister, and, after a next-door theft, investigates strange goings-on at her uncle’s bookstore where she works.


Friday, June 30, 2023

Three dimensional character

 Ever read a thriller with never-ending action and conflict?

Of course you have, or one day started one, now collecting dust.

The problem is exhaustion. The character failed to breathe unless

gasping for lifesaving oxygen.

Here's a writing tip.

Think three dimensional.  The character has a past, present, and future.

In each dimension the character has internal conflicts, external conflicts,

goals, and motivations. While they can be the same, odds are they are

not. The simple explanation is that characters as well as humans mature,

learn life lessons, fail, and a myriad of other things.

Saying this is seeing the tip of the iceberg. Explore every detail to broaden

your character. You'll be glad you did.

                            Self-serving note

Multiple e-books by Author Donan Berg will be on sale starting July 1, 2023.

It's limited. There's romance, mystery, thriller, and fantasy.

A good novel to start with is A Body To Bones.

Go to:  Click here for A Body To Bones

Wednesday, June 14, 2023

Editing? Find your way.

 Story editing is a tiring, yet exhilerating task.

Successful completion is as wide open as the formula to get there.

Let's explore an example.

The original version:

Sculptured by the wind’s swirl, the cylinder of twirling snowflakes lifted from the curbside pile, raked an icy chill across Jenny’s unprotected facial skin. Without a desire to stop and delay her plodding morning journey to the bookstore, she ignored the stray cat’s caterwaul behind her.

 While the original imagery tries to create a mood, it overpowers if not confuses. If it's slow going for Jenny, the reader doesn't get to understand there is a Jenny until too late.

Let's try to rewrite:

Off to Jenny’s right, a windy swirl lifted snowflakes from a curbside pile. Sculptured into a twirling “dust” devil, the cylindrical funnel raked an icy chill across her unprotected facial skin. With no desire to stop and delay her morning journey to the bookstore, she plodded on, this day ignoring the stray cat’s caterwaul behind her.

The original first sentence is divided into two parts. Within three words we know we are on a journey with Jenny. The cylinder of swirling snowflakes is emphasized to be a cylindrical funnel. Not a tornado, but similar to a summer dust kickup.

The last sentence in the revision could also be split into separate sentences. Left together they may imply a simultaneous perception. All is subjective. 

Try it yourself.

Use your own examples or visit Author Donan Bert at Amazon.com . This link will take you to his Find the Girl, A Fantasy Novel where a free sample is available. If you wish, his other novels also offer free "inside the book" samples.


 



Thursday, April 27, 2023

The Bones Dance Foxtrot ebook now free, but limited

 Award-winning author Donan Berg offers you an exciting oppotunity to experience his mystery series with a free ebook.

The entertaining mystery, heartwarming romance, The Bones Dance Foxtrot, is

free in ebook format for a limited time and quantity, first come, first served.

Visit this website The Bones Dance Foxtrot 

Enjoy this reading party and be encouraged to leave a review where you obtain the free ebook or at Author Donan Berg's book site at Donan Berg at Amazon.com . 

Author Donan Berg is the author of twelve novels. Award winners in romance and fantasy plus five-star reviews in mystery, thrillers, and police procedurals.